Lance Powers RP - Escort

(RP) My A-wing starfighter zoomed in and out of laserfire as I raced towards the remaining squadrons. I swooped beneath a combat freighter, then pulled up quickly, narrowly avoiding a head-on collision with an escape pod. Soon, I found myself among KC starfighters, and spoke through my radio, "All KC squadrons: Fall back to the Karyatesa!"

Within moments the squadrons came behind me, and together we maneuvered through the gauntlet of starships and debris. When at last the Karyatesa came into view, we slowed our starfighters, preparing for landing. However, an officer came through on the radio, warning us that enemy ships were drawing near. "Only the damaged starfighters will land." The rest of us had to help defend the fleet. I set my sights on the closest enemy capital ship, now almost in firing range. Laser bolts had already started streaming from its array of laser cannons, but the blasts had no effect on the surge-shielded KC fleet. I banked sideways to avoid a barrage of lasers, then zipped alongside the massive ship. A squadron of enemy starfighters came out of the hangar behind us, and immediately began blasting away at the squadron I had taken with me. The ship to my left took a hit to the wing and swerved, then started trailing smoke as another shot connected with its engine. As the left side of the starfighter became engulfed in flames, it began spinning out of control, eventually crashing into the side of the enemy capital ship. I executed an evasive maneuver to get a fighter off my tail, ending up behind it. I pressed in the controls and let loose a volley of laserfire, blasting into the starfighter's engines. An explosion followed, and a piece of debris came dangerously close to hitting my cockpit. Finally, my squadron reached the back of the enemy ship, and focused all of our firepower on the engines. I launched a torpedo, striking one of the engines near-perfectly, causing a small burst of flame to erupt near the surface. Another storm of laserfire and then engine was reduced to a burning wreck. By now, many starfighters had been shot down on both sides, and I ordered my squadron to retreat back to the Karyatesa just as several escape pods detached from the capital ship. I fired off a few shots at one, but missed and decided not to waste my time. When I was once again in front of the enemy capital ship, now almost completely destroyed and probably evacuated, I was met by a lone enemy starfighter. I tried to avoid the shots that were fired in my direction, but one caught my right wing. I gripped my controls and blasted the enemy's cockpit with a torrent of laser bolts, sending the ship careening down towards the surface of the planet. As I struggled to stabilize my A-Wing, another laser came out of nowhere and clipped my left wing. Smoke was now coming from both sides of my ship, and I desperately aimed for the Karyatesa, barely slipping inside the hangar. The landing was sloppy, but it wasn't as bad as I had thought. Leaping from my cockpit, I notified the workers in the hangar, and together we put out the fires and began repairing the damage. After some minor repairs, I started towards Quillian's command center to receive my next orders. (RP Over)

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